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Old 09-28-2009
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It's untitled, so suggestions are welcome:



If it is your hand that drags me through the miriest of clay, I would beg for you to continue to do so a thousand times over, for in those actions you would have your hand on me still....a hold on us, and I would gladly take that over noting at all.

Poor tortured, distorted heart, the scraps of pain you're willing to endure, all for the sake of having him near.
But wont you soon grow weary of it all? Won't your strength begin to falter?

Oh feeble mind! You know not the strength of a heart that loves.
It can be broken and shattered into seemingly irreparable pieces, but find the largest piece out of the rubble and begin to build upon it.
The heart is broken but has yet to die.
It carries an array of tools to mend itself together again.
It has passion, obsession, adoration, love, desire, forgiveness, hope and courage.
Only the heart could be able to withstand and tolerate such complicated things such as emotions and love.
The brain is for rational thinking...always wanting to know, why?, and never finding peace to just LOVE.

So you see, I'm more than happy to be dragged through the mud and to be hated, because hate I can work with...It's when he feels nothing at all that I have lost him forever.
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On Crack?
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dragging bliss.
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Old 09-29-2009
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On Crack?
Thanks Tec, but nah.

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dragging bliss.
NICE!!!
I like!
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tru!!!!
so i'm reading this and i'm like "wow" tru's awsome!
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Tru dat!
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^^^ wow, that was unique.
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Awwwe...thanks guys!!!!

Lub y'all!!!!!!
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I really like what you have written. What about "detrimental" for the title. Idk just a thought
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^^^^^Ah, thanks for the input.

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whoe's the noob?
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Is someone ready to sink their teeth in?
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you offering?
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I'm not sweet enough.
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How about generic heartfelt reflection?
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^^^sounds like a medical condition
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It does, doesn't it...ha, ha.

Thank you Californio.
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