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Old 08-11-2007
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I am by NO stretch of the imagination, a writer, however, I wrote this at a time in my life when I was dealing with said issues .. I'd forgotten about it, but recently found it, so I thought I'd post it. WARNING: It's pretty "cheesy" - sorry bout that (lol)!!


He says that he loves me,
He even tells me how much ..
He whispers it soft, a gentle touch.

Today that changed,
He said he lied ..
That he no longer wants me,
He walked away as I cried.

So, I sit here alone,
I've cried my last tear ..
I want to move forward,
And forget my fears.

But how does one do that,
How do they go on?
To be all that they've dreamed of,
Yet not be used as a pawn?

To be strong in their heart,
And stand firm in their faith ..
To live life to it's fullest,
Minus feelings of hate?

I will not do this,
I won't let him win ..
I have our 2 children,
That he left too on a whim ..

He left me here,
To be alone ..
Knowing his love was a lie!!

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this is very deep...thanks for sharing.
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why does it have to be a He?

why can't it be She?!
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lol...because the author is a she!
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lol...because the author is a she!
Well the Author should have thought about the fellas as well!....damn sexist!




"He/She" would have been very appropriate
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this is very deep...thanks for sharing.
Thank you for reading and commenting lizdlt!!

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why does it have to be a He?

why can't it be She?!
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lol...because the author is a she!

^^ HaHa .. what she said!!
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iT'S dEEP
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dam girl is very deep, has alot of feelings
thnkx for sharing it with us.
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its deep, me encanta
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Thank you!!

I hope you all liked it and that it can speak a little something to someone going thru the same .. a time like this in someone's life is so lonely and scary ..
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I liked this drop...The way you expressed yourself... Firme......
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Right on. love is an illusion... except your Mommas. ;=)
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nice drop.
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Thanx .. your personal comments are very appreciated!!
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Very good poetry, I liked it.
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its a good drop, it shows you put true feeling behind it, one motivation that brings out nice poems. My only criticism is that I would have liked to see this more in stanza form. Makes it easier to read. However, thanks for sharing.
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What is stanza form? I don't write normally, so I don't know what that is ..?..

And criticism is always welcome .. sincerely!! It's a way to learn!!



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stanza, is poetry form paragraphs. Kind of like verse's of a song.
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Oh, okay, I getcha!! Thanx again, mister!!
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oh my guudness!!!!!!!!! it touched me seriously good poem you did really good.
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Fuck love.
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I agree mister .. more now than ever
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DOPE!
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LMAO Sweets - I luv you and Meztli (and it ain't no lie) .. like that??

THANK YOU my infamous partner in crime!!
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