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Old 04-11-2006
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hell Naw Gurl. Thats Some Good Shit. I Can't Wait To Hear Da Rest Of It. I Just Started To Read It Today.
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Damn I cant believe he did that to her. I hope sleepy kicks his ass pero keep writing esa. Much Love
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keep going ...im hooked and its hard to know or feel what you went through ...but you have becomed a very intelligent young lady that has alot to gain from writing these stories ...much luv mija ...ur #1 fan!
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DAYM! i cant believe it! yo espero romeo doesnt just get his ass kicked! i hope he gets taken out! i love this story....
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*With Sleepy*

Sleepy calls Trusty

Trusty: yeah

Sleepy: we need to have a meeting

Trusty: when?

Sleepy: now

Trusty: everyones over at my canton right now

Sleepy: aight, I'm on my way

Trusty: orale

*Click*

Sleepy drives over to Trusty's house

Guardian: so what's up?

Sleepy: my brother needs to pay for what he's done

Payaso: damn, what the hell got into you

Sleepy: he went to far this time. I talked to Dreamer and she told me everything that's happened

Trusty: stupid fucker

Sleepy: what's worse is he went to see her

All: WHAT!?!?!?!?!

Sleepy: he went to apologize

Guardian: she didnt take him back, right?

Sleepy: naw. Where's my brother?

Trusty: your sister called and said he was in his room. he came home drunk and passed out in his room

Sleepy: not for long. Let's go

The boys pack up and head out

*Romeo's house*

Romeo was passed out on his bed. He didnt notice when all the guys walked in and shut the door.

Sleepy: Romeo

Romeo: (waking up) huh? (sees them) oh hey guys, what's up?

Payaso: you've been a bad boy

Romeo: what are you talking about?

Sleepy: you fucked up carnal, you fucked up bad

Guardian picked Romeo up off the bed and stood him up.

Sleepy: so tell me carnal, do you enjoy hitting girls?

Sleepy punched him hard in the stomach

Romeo: (groans)

Payaso: does it give you a rush?

Payaso slapped him accross the face.

Trusty: does it make you feel strong?

Trusty knees him in the crouch and Romeo falls to the floor. The guys surround him and start to beat on his ass. Kicking him and punching him. Romeo was to weak and drunk to fight back.

Sleepy: you didnt deserve Dreamer

Sleepy pulled out a switchblade out of nowhere and held it up to Romeo's throat.

Sleepy: you messed with the one person I love the most. You deserve to die for what you made Dreamer go through

All the guys watched as Sleepy held the knife to Romeo's throat.

Trusty: Sleepy man, calm down. I think he's messed up enough

Romeo's eyes were starting to swell up. His lips were busted, he was coughing up blood.

Payaso: Sleepy remember he's till your carnal

Sleepy: this bitch aint my carnal

Sleepy got up and put the knife away.

*Sleepy's cell rings*

Sleepy: hello

*pause*

Sleepy: you want me to pick you up?

*pause*

Sleepy: ok, I'll meet you there

*Click*

Sleepy got off the floor and walked outside.

Guardian: what are we gonna do with him?

Trusty: nothing, (kicks him again) let's hope he's learned his lesson

the guys walked out and left the house.
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whoa!!!!!!!!! he got wat he diserved anyways keep it coming it getting good
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i love your stories keep ritin home gurl
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DAMNZ..... thats what that bitch deserved shit.... but damnz you cant kill your own blood serioz... thats good that sleepy didnt kill him but shit im happy he got his ass beat shit... wellz keep droppin them lines the story is good... alratoz..
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keeep it comin ....give me more!
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*With Dreamer*

Right after Sleepy had left, Dreamer's doctor walked in and told her she could go home. Dreamer called Lonely and had her pick her up and bring her clothes.

Lonely: so what did the doctor say?

Dreamer: I have to rest for a couple of days. I can't stress myself out. (thinking) it's not good for the baby

Lonely: where's Sleepy?

Dreamer: he went somewhere, I'm guessing he paid Romeo a visit along with the other boys

Lonely: probably

Dreamer: let me call him

*ring,ring,ring*

Sleepy: hello

Dreamer: hey I'm getting out of the hospital

Sleepy: ok, do you want me to pick you up?

Dreamer: no, Lonely's here. Meet us at my house

Sleepy: ok, I'll meet you there then

*Click*

Dreamer: something happened

Lonely: why do you say that?

Dreamer: he sounded different

Lonely: well let's get you home

Dreamer: ok

Lonely and Dreamer leave the hospital and go back to Dreamer's house. When they get there Sleepy is waiting on the steps.

Sleepy: (huggin Dreamer) hey mija

Dreamer: hey

Dreamer looks at him.

Dreamer: what happened?

Sleepy looked into her eyes and knew she knew what had gone down

Sleepy: what had to happen

Dreamer: Sleepy

Sleepy: justice was served that's all you need to know Dreamer

Dreamer: tell me one thing, is he still alive?

Sleepy: yes

Dreamer knew he was telling the truth. They go inside and sit on the couch and watch t.v.



Now I know what you're thinking. Romeo got what he deserved, why should Dreamer care whether or not he's alive. I did care. Dont ask me why but I did. I didnt love Romeo, but he had still been one of my close friends and in a way I still cared for him even after everything that happened.





I hope you're liking it. Thanks for all the love. Keep it coming. Laterz
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My bad browneyes i havent posted in a long time but i just finished reading ur story and its soooooo good still lovin all ur stories!!! keep it comin u got madd talent gurl!!much luv and props!!
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Wow I just read it and wow he got what he deserved. I can understand why you still cared. I mean a good punching and kicking with some blood is what he needed and again if he ever did something like that.But anyways hope to read some more and take care.
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ey... que paso???? why u stop u was suppose to keep goinn lol....
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Lol Im Tellin You Post Atleast Two Chapters A Day... This Aint Enough, I Never Use To Come On Soy Until I Read This Now Im Hooked Lmao
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mija no one should judge you for thinking that ...its only natural to feel that way ... god is the judge! you are who you are becuz of all that you have been through .... i admire you for your courage to go what you went through and what kinda person you are today becuz of it! much luv mija .....
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*Romeo*

Romeo woke up the next day really bruised. he could barely breath becuz his body hurt so bad. He cleaned himself up the best he could, showered, changed and headed out. He went to Dreamer's house.

*Dreamer's house*

Sleepy had spent the night with Dreamer. They had fallen asleep on the couch watching t.v. Romeo got there and jut walked into the house without knocking.

Romeo: WHAT THE FUCK!?!?!?!

Sleepy and Dreamer woke up and looked at Romeo.

Romeo: I can't believe this shit

Sleepy: you better calm your ass down

Romeo: naw fuck that. So now that we're done you're gonna go running to my brother

Dreamer didnt say anything

Romeo: say something, you stupid whore

Sleepy punched Romeo

Sleepy: dont fucking talk to her like that again

Romeo was on the floor holding his jaw

Romeo: that's what she is, she's done with me so now she ahs o move on with you

Sleepy: Apparantly the beating we gave wasnt enough. Shut frickin mouth before I repeat yesterday and this time I wont back off

Romeo looked at his brother and saw the serious face he had. Romeo got up and walked out the door.

Sleepy: are you ok?

Dreamer: yeah I'm fine

Sleepy: you sure

Dreamer: yeah

Sleepy stayed there awhile longer and then left to go to work.


Over the next 3 days everything was calm. Sleepy would go to work ten he would spend time with Dreamer. Dreamer stayed in bed like he doctor said. All the homies would visit her. She talked to her brothers and she was due to leave in 2 days. No one had seen Romeo. He knew that Dreamer was leaving. He was feeling like shit becuz of everything. He still loved Dreamer and didnt want to lose her.

*Dreamer's house*

Dreamer was all packed and ready to leave.

*Doorbell rings*

Dreamer opened the door and saw that no one was there. Instead she found a rose and a letter on her step. She picked it and took it inside.

The letter read,


Dear Lucia,

Mija, I know that right now you dont want to hear from me, but I needed to talk to you. I love you Dreamer. I know I messed up in the worst way, but I love you. I'm going into rehab for my alcohol abuse and anger management classes. I want to get better for you. Please dont lose all your faith in me. Remember that I will always be thinking of you. I love you Dreamer, with all my heart.

Chris aka Romeo

A tear rolled down Dreamer's eye.

Sleepy: mija, you ready?

Dreamer turns around and sees Sleepy in the door way.

Dreamer: (hiding the letter) yeah

Sleepy: let's go

Dreamer: ok, I'll be right out

Sleepy takes her suitcase and puts it in his car. Dreamer folds up the letter and puts it in her pocket. She takes one more look around her house.

*Flashback*

Boy and girl are sitting in girl's living room.

Boy: I'll never let anyone hurt you

Girl: will you protect me forever

Boy: as long as I'm alive, no one will hurt you

Girl: I'd stop living if you ever left me

Boy: I'll never leave you

Girl: I love you Jared

Boy: I love you Lucia

Girl: never leave me

Boy: never stop loving me

*Fade out*

Dreamer then goes out and gets into Sleepy's car. Sleepy takes her to the airport and she takes of for Los Angeles.









This is not the end. I repeat this is NOT the end. There's still more to come.
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im so dang glad its not the end ...i was getting ready to wage a boycott on you :P ....hehehe
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omg, that brought tears to my eyes, i'm glad it's not the end, keep up da good work!
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Wow I just read and I was in tears, you are a strong woman. I admire you.Take care and will check back on your story.
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Damn esa I'm glad that aint tha end. I hate Romeo and I'm glad Dreamer is leaving. Keep writing esa. Much Love
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